Apr 27, 2014

Green Eyes --- Part II (This is heaven) (Teaser: Scribble, scribble, scribble, Mr. &) (Reposted)

When we started the research on "This is heaven," we wrote a few posts (about it) (the research). Here's the first one, reposted:

We've started the research on part two of the Green Eyes and are wondering how to get our mind around various issues, such as (1) vampires, (2) the end-of-the-word, (3) X-factors (America-got-talent or whatever), (4) Romeo & Juliette, (5) murder, in particular murder by poisoning, (6) amnesia and/or the loss of identity, (7) pageants, (8) Ebonics, (9) verse meters, and (10) orgasms, in particular female ones.


The idea is that John and Alex will stay together, so we cannot repeat the love-story-construction of Part I. Let's hope we'll get some mileage out of Alex's mysterious post-suicidal personality (he's suffering from serious amnesia, has no recollection of his personal past), and, in particular, out of his sexual ambiguity vis à vis John --- Alex had been informed of his homosexual orientation, more or less accepted the information, experimented a bit with straight sex, and is now living with an anxious John, an unreliable narrator who doesn't quite understand whether Alex is real, or just trying to be nice. Ideally, Alex would have shed his depression but maintained most other parts of his personality, but that's perhaps too much to ask for, as John understands himself. From the point of view of the further story, Alex will have to walk a fine line between ignorance and insouciance.

Anyhow, bloodcurdlin' drama, blood, corpses, howls, tears, despair, etc, all this won't come from a chamber-drama about the understanding of misunderstandings between the two main characters. So we have to look elsewhere, and our first regard fell on vampires.

Lets hope we don't have to explain why.

So, it vampires, and now what? Vampires are not enough, of course, unless we are going to travel to fantasy land and introduce them as real characters, an option we weighed and dropped, not because we think it's silly, but because we don't write well-enough to pull it off. Okay, we also think it's silly, the main reason for bringing vampires up.

So our vampires won't be real, or they will be (real) in the sense of self-dramatization, role play, costumes, make-up, psychosis, or gift-shop dentures. Whence the idea of some sort of pageant that will elect a Miss Dracula, or King Dracula, or King Vampire, or whatever.

We've thought it a good idea to maintain a tight schedule on the time line; the first part covers a week, from one Sunday to the next, and the pace of the narration creates a certain sense of breathlessness which helps to maintain the tension and turn the pages. Accordingly, the second part shouldn't take more than a week either. So we could try to fill the week with an elimination contest along the lines of X-factor/BigBrother/Get-me-out-of-here histrionics, the vampires being this year's theme of the annual, tourist-attracting Georgia Beach Festival Week.

Would-be Draculas will compete for the prize, and they need supporters to pull it off, there will be judges and a voting audience. So we are going to have tribes vying for resources and hence the classical setting for eccentric groups engaged in sectarian strife, preparing the ground for a Romeo-&Juliette dramette.

Now, one of the rules of erotic writing requires the simultaneous engagement of minimally three senses, sounds, say, plus movements and smells, and along those lines we would like our tribes to differentiate along various axes in a multidimensional sectarian space, and we thought it a neat idea to complement the obvious dichotomies of fangs/no fangs, blood/no blood with some odder behavioral traits, whence our new interest in verse meters: one or two tribes will seek deeper identity in rhyme and rhythm. You, as a member of tribe X, will have to speak in a certain meter, or, perhaps, in Rap. This creates complications, and we can have a few people putting in a brilliant performance once is a while; if you have a whole day to write a few lines of Rap, they better be brilliant anyhow. Plus, littler kids will find it difficult to pull it off, so there's fun in it for the whole family, including Shakespeare-loving grandfathers.

Continues here.  And here are a few selected chapters of the Green Eyes (Part I).

(Great you are still there: "Scribble, scribble, scribble, Mr. Gibbon," that's a real anecdote, somebody actually making fun at Edward Gibbon, the author of the "Decline and Fall of the Roman Empire." And yes, we have a serious reference to Gibbon in the Green Eyes, in the first chapter, which is so pornographic we haven't dared posting anything of it.)

Okay, let's go out on a limb, and posit---in true John. E. Wily tradition---that us, (i.e., the first chapter of the Green Eyes, relegated to an appendix) is the first serious porn with a serious reference to Edward Gibbon. Here are two mini-fragments, heavily censored:

He [that would be Alex] waits until my whimpering subsides. He waits some more. “Turning pain into lust,” he says, “the definition of sublime.”
“Really?” I say.
“Gibbon,” he answers, “Gibbon’s definition.”

That’s possibly what it did. I got distracted, wondering about “Gibbons,” because, the next thing is that he is in again. Ooh, Gibbons, it hurts, it totally hurts. How to describe pain? Radiating from the pelvis into the known universe and the beyond. At lightning speed. They must feel it on the beach…but…every millisecond of it is in itself bearable, of the pain. I count milliseconds, and exhale.


"How about me," I say. "I'll help you," Green Eyes replies. He inserts his tongue squarely into my mouth and jerks my dick. I touch his body, feel him up with my fingertips, his pecs, the washboard tummy, his surfer's back, his devilish dick down there, almost out of reach but still hard, I’m searching for the sense of direction that any good orgasm requires. And there it is. My crotch explodes. History repeats itself. (‘Right,’ I think, ‘Gibbon, Decline and Fall.’)

Are you still there? Then you'll possibly like the GREEN EYES. The first part is out now, available as Kindle book on Amazon, under this link:

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